My First Animation: Old Man

[BrightWaterStudios 12]

Hello

Please, i need reviews of my animation to learn and improve..

Thank you!!! 

 

[Rollo 3.2k]

The first half was alright for a beginner.

But then the second half...

Lemme tell ya something: Please do not put sexual content into your videos. Or at least put a warning in the topic or the video title.

 

Aside from that, here are some tips:

• Good camera movements, but maybe try Depth of Field on it.
• The movements are too... Choppy could be the right term? Experiment with different Transitions when moving objects and characters.
• When the girl brings out the cake, it clips through the wall and the door. That generally doesn't look too appealing.
• The background could use more interesting scenery. Maybe a town or a forest, just don't let flatlands show.
• The story was sort of hard to follow. That has a little to do with the lack of transitions in the characters.
• When he opens the door, it rotates in a strange manner. I would suggest changing the custom rotation point so it looks more accurate.
• The torches do not give light or fire, which doesn't look good and is ironic given that they're torches.
• The scene could do with more contrast in the lighting. Even just a candle or something would provide for your scene's contrast.
• It looks a little strange to have movements without limbs bending switch into movements with bending.
• Sometimes the characters are underposed, or not posed at all. Even just rotating and bending the legs and arms a tiny bit makes it look more appealing and more professional.

That's all I've got. Don't be discouraged and keep at it.

[lou3d 355]

The animation was great! Just a little bit choppy, and yes the torches and a bit. Also I like how you give a little comedy and the way you give expression to the old man, which was really good. Keep at it.

[crustyjpeg 2.7k]

Really good for a start!  

Keep it up.

[BrightWaterStudios 12]

 

The first half was alright for a beginner.

But then the second half...

Lemme tell ya something: Please do not put sexual content into your videos. Or at least put a warning in the topic or the video title.

 

Aside from that, here are some tips:

• Good camera movements, but maybe try Depth of Field on it.
• The movements are too... Choppy could be the right term? Experiment with different Transitions when moving objects and characters.
• When the girl brings out the cake, it clips through the wall and the door. That generally doesn't look too appealing.
• The background could use more interesting scenery. Maybe a town or a forest, just don't let flatlands show.
• The story was sort of hard to follow. That has a little to do with the lack of transitions in the characters.
• When he opens the door, it rotates in a strange manner. I would suggest changing the custom rotation point so it looks more accurate.
• The torches do not give light or fire, which doesn't look good and is ironic given that they're torches.
• The scene could do with more contrast in the lighting. Even just a candle or something would provide for your scene's contrast.
• It looks a little strange to have movements without limbs bending switch into movements with bending.
• Sometimes the characters are underposed, or not posed at all. Even just rotating and bending the legs and arms a tiny bit makes it look more appealing and more professional.

That's all I've got. Don't be discouraged and keep at it.

Thanks for all your advices  I'll analyze them! 

[iiBerry_ 67]

Well, it's pretty good for a first animation...

here are some tips:
 

• When the old man holds the emerald, you can tell it's not parented. Try parenting it. Sadly, you can't keyframe parenting Mine-Imator, so for when the man passes the emerald to the girl, make a copy, parent it to the girl's hand, and make the positioning roughly the same as the emerald parented to the old man, and use the visibility feature at the right time
• Try using different transitions, it makes a huge difference (If you use them right)
• Add a custom rotation point to the door
• Try adding more scenery, example: Instead of that flat land you could import a piece from a minecraft world, and if you don't have minecraft, use one of the schematics MI comes with.
• Try adding more lighting, it makes it look more professional.
• When they're standing still, try moving the body parts slightly instead of being in the default position.
• Try adding effects, like depth of field, mess with the SSAO, etc.

Edited February 16, 2017 by iiBerry_

[willingsas 1.9k]

I don't know why, but i feel like you watch explodingtnt. A lot.

[BrightWaterStudios 12]

 

I don't know why, but i feel like you watch explodingtnt. A lot.

I don't watch explodingtnt but I know it. xD. Because what you say?